逍遥右脑 2010-03-03 12:51
快写要点
如何在30分钟内快速、整洁写完文章。 快速： 熟悉考场写作三个步骤的时间分配：
第一步：审题、确定立场、列出理由（只需要在草稿纸上用英文单词或汉语列出各个理由，防止遗忘）最少3分钟最多5分钟：
要避免两个极端： 用时太少，理由没有想清楚就开始写作，不仅造成文章逻辑结构不清，还会引起行文中频繁的修正，欲速则不达； 用时太多，不要追求一次思考就能把每一条理由及相关例证都想出来。其实想出两条之后就可以动笔，各个理由的例证可以写到该段时边思考边写。这一点你不必怀疑，只要你的思维还是正常的，一定能做到。
第二步：正文写作最少22分钟最多26分钟：
a. 各段写作时注意对段落的不同部分给予不同的重视：主题句给予最大重视，注意炼句，别说你不想写主题句，主题句可以使读者和笔者本人更清晰该段落写什么。各段中支持性细节写作不必遵循相同的模式：
有n种选择可供参考：1. 举具体事例 2. 说对方相对缺点3. 使用数据 4. 使用假想例子5. 使用类比、比喻、引用等修辞手段来论述。 哪一种你最容易想出来，就用哪一种。
b.考前将文章开头、结尾、例证、让步等各种句套背熟练,并且练习和模考时把他们用熟，要象做完型填空一样对待考场作文。别试图在考场上再现去决定比如哪种开头好，怎样结尾好。使用自己选种的套话。
c.当被告知还有5分钟结束时，一般你已经该写到最后一条理由，或者已经在做结尾。要确保文章有结尾段。（不排除将他和最后一条理由的末段结合在一起的可能性）
第三步：检查
需要1-3分钟
有侧重点地检查：
1、句法：确保每句话是完整的，有谓语，且简单句只有一个谓语。
2、时态：文章绝大部分使用的是一般现在时；一般现在时第三人称要使用单数；使用过去发生的事例时用的是过去时；
3、主谓一致
按此三步，持续练习5篇以上，可以确保时间问题。
整洁：
A、TWE要求必须用铅笔写作文，你要自己准备好铅笔和橡皮。橡皮要有韧性，太硬会擦破纸，有错误要擦干净再改；
B、第一遍写作时要求字迹不要太大也不要太小，通常一行写10-12个左右单词为宜。如果书法不好，可以在考前练习写一下斜体的26个字母的写法。（别笑，此法被人屡试屡爽）
一篇外籍专家对TWE文章的评改报告
The following TOEFL essay was written by a non-native English speaker. Note the way the essay was analyzed for content, organization and grammar.
TOEFL Essay Question-------------题目
Supporters of technology say that it solves problems and makes life better. Opponents argue that technology creates new problems that may threaten or damage the quality of life. Using one or two examples, discuss these two positions. Which view of technology do you support? Why?
Student’s unedited answer------学生例文
Technology is improved especially in developed countries. Our lives is connected to technology. Technology is used in everyday life. People use it in different ways. It can make our lives better, but it can be cruel if it’s used for bad purposes.
First, technology makes our lives better because it serves us well and helps us save time. As we can see one of well-known inventions is internet. For example, in the developed countries, Internet are used in everyday life. It’ s used in schools and businesses because it provides a lot of information about anything all over the world.
On the other hand, technology can be very dangerous for us. Because of its ability of finding information, our personal information can no longer be sec ret. For instance, computer is used to keep most of the information. In other cases, hackers can search to our secret file and steal the information via computer. Another example is that some companies can search and find information about us just by our credit card receipts or checks. That could make our lives worse than before.
In short, technology gives us many advantages.
----------------------------------专家的修改
Analysis of student’s answer
Content
A. Understanding the question
You must discuss both sides of the issue and then tell which side you support. In your answer, you did discuss both sides, but you did not tell which view of technology you supported.
B. Restating the question
Your first paragraph is a good attempt to restate the question but it does not include all the information from the original question. Here is an example of a restatement of the question:
Some people feel that technology enhances our lives and others feel technology is damaging to our lives. We are connected to technology. Computers, television, and cars are all the result of technology. It can make our lives better, however, it can be bad if it’s used for negative purposes.
C. Body paragraphs and final paragraph
Be sure each paragraph in the body of your essay begins with a main idea (or topic sentence) and is followed by support and examples. The last sentence of each paragraph should be a concluding sentence. You have good ideas, but you should include more examples in the body of the essay.
In body paragraph #1, provide more information about how technology helps us save time and add a concluding sentence. Here is an example of what you could include:
For example, students can use the internet to research information for term papers. They can also access information about colleges and universities, book reviews, news and weather, famous people...the list is endless. Businesses also benefit from the internet. They can reach a global audience with their products and services. In addition, they can go online and examine their competitors’ products, services and prices. The benefits of technology are numerous.
Body paragraph #2 needs a clearer concluding sentence. For example: Using technology for this type of negative purpose causes us lots of problem s and makes our lives difficult. Your final paragraph should summarize your main ideas and include your view of technology. You have not done that. Here is an example of a possible final paragraph:
In short, there are both positive and negative aspects to technology. I support the continued development of technology because the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. I feel that technology is needed to help us move forward. Without it, our lives will remain stagnant.
Organization
Good overall essay organization. Good use of transitions such as first, on the other hand, in short. Organization within paragraphs is good. You begin with the main idea and then give support. Remember to include a concluding sentence for each paragraph.
Grammar
Your grammar is not bad. You should focus on improving your subject-verb agreement and word choice. Below are examples of these two grammatical problems taken from your essay.
Subject-Verb Agreement
Paragraph 1: our lives is (should be) our lives are
Paragraph 2: internet are used (should be) internet is used
Paragraph 3: computer is used (should be) computers are used Word Choice
Paragraph 1: cruel (better choice:) bad
Paragraph 1: bad (better choice:) negative
Paragraph 3: ability of finding (better choice:) capable of finding
Understanding your TOEFL score
The TOEFL test is the Test of English as a Foreign Language. This test is required for entrance to universities and colleges in the United States. The computer based test (CBT) is composed of four sections: listening, reading, structure (grammar) and essay writing. You will receive three scores; one for listening, one for reading and a combined score for structure and essay writing. Your TOEFL essay will comprise one-half of your structure/writing score.